Monday, 16 July 2012

Hookers & Hangers Bloghop: Hookers!

The lovely peeps at Falling For Fiction are hosting a "Hookers and Hangers" Bloghop.

The deal is today we post the first line of each chapter and on Wednesday we post the last line. The link above will take you to the post detailing all about it and most importantly all the other lovely awesome people posting their Hookers today! So you should definitely check it out.

Today is those "Hookers" to see how well we hook you in.
These are from my soon to be queried (I hope) novel "Networked", a YA thriller set in the near future about a girl, Devon, trying to find out what happened to her missing, presumed dead, brother.

My First Five Hookers for the Hookers & Hangers Bloghop!

1. I hadn't escaped the Network, exactly.
2. I disconnected, unable to talk to anyone.
3.I struggled to match Dad's pace as he strode toward the school’s main door.
4. I sloped along the corridor, peeking in classrooms as I went.
5. By the final class, Government and Politics, no new idea had magically arrived in my brain like I hoped.


I would love to know what you think, and I mean that genuinely, if you wouldn't read on that's kind of useful information!

Hangers will be up Wed, and I'll be back tonight to check out everybody else's - Yay!

64 comments:

  1. I really love your first hooker - very intriguing!

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  2. The first couple have me hooked. I'm intrigued in what is the net... and the last one about the idea in your brain oozed voice. Number 3 and 4 weren't as WOW, but they were still interesting. In conclusion - I would read on :) Good job. :)

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    1. Thank you. I agree, 3 and 4 probably aren't as strong - was an interesting exercise for me listing these out and has certainly made me look at them anew! Thank you for commenting!

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  3. I admire anyone who can write in first person.

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    1. I actually reworked this novel into 1st because close 3rd just wasn't working for me! Thanks for commenting.

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  4. The first one nailed it for me! Good luck with querying. :D

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    1. Thank you v. much! (Esp for the luck!)

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  5. Great hookers, thanks for sharing. :)

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  6. I love the first one! The title of your novel sounds great as well. Good luck querying! :)

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    1. Thank you, eek I'll need it ;)

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  7. I really like the first one. Definitely makes me want to read more and find out what the Network is and why this narrator is talking about escaping it! Let me know if I can be of any assistance as you begin querying!

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    1. Thank you so much gosh esp with the querying offer of help, I may take you up on that ;)

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  8. I really liked your first line and your last line. Makes me wonder what the book is about :)

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    1. Thank you, glad those two are working for you!

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  9. I wanted to know what happens next!

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    1. Thank you, that's good to know ;)

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  10. I really like that last one. I can relate!

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    1. Hee, me too, thank you for commenting!

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    1. Thank you, that's good to know ;)

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  12. Excellent start to your story! Hooker #1 is awesome! As are the rest ;)

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    1. Thank you very much, especially for running this great bloghop, it's really been interesting to look at these on their own merits.

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  13. I really liked the last one. I thought it had a great voice! Can't wait to see the hangers :)

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    1. Thank you, especially for running this, it's really fun and interesting to join in on!

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  14. These are great! The story sounds really interesting!

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  15. I like the second one! It's brief, but that just means there are so many possibilities!

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    1. Thank you, that's good to know ;)

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  16. I love the premise of this story!! The internet hookers really peaked my interests as well.

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    1. Thank you so much for commenting!

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  17. excellent! i feel her awkward tension! really like the first and last ones!

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    1. Thank you very much, interesting to hear those two are going down well ;)

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  18. I went to publish a few lovely people's comments and Blogger rejected them! Am sure I pressed publish :( so if your comment isn't here I am sorry and trying to fix it! I don't know what weirdness happened.

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  19. The first one has be knowing that I want to read more and find out what the Network is. The second continues to draw my interest. Great job!!

    See ya on Wednesday for hangers.

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    1. Thank you, am looking forward to the hangers!

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  20. Ohh, LOVE the first one! Definitely makes me want to read more. So intriguing. The last one is great, too :D

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    1. Thank you, glad to know they both work well!

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  21. The first one is the most interesting for me, which is good if it's the first line of your book! I'm a new subscriber courtesy of this bloghop - it's been great for finding similar blogs!

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    1. Thank you, happy the first one works! I am following you too, it is v. good bloghop helping to find new people.

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  22. The opener is quite strong, pulling me in to want to know more. What is the Network? That would keep me reading.

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    1. Thank you, very happy to hear that :)

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  23. One thing to note, the first four all have the same structure (though they are SUPER interesting). I 'verb' and the rest of the sentence. Might want to look just to be sure your sentence structure is varied. Helps with flow and stuff.

    Just something to keep in mind since you're querying soon! Good luck! I'm so glad I'm follow you now so I can follow your journey :)

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    1. Thank you, and thank you for running this bloghop- because without pulling them out and putting them separately next to each other I would never have been able to see the similar opening structure. I will definitely vary it, thank you for the tip and the follow.

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  24. I like #5 the best. And I'm curious what the network is too.

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    1. Thank you, am glad 5 works well!

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  25. I like #1 and #5, great hooks! Thanks for stopping by my blog :)

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    1. Thank you for picking those out and for stopping by here!

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  26. I love these hooks. I'm really intrigued by your plot and it sounds so good. Good luck querying it! :-) Thanks for sharing today and I look forward to Wednesday's post

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    1. Thank you for the good luck wishes, and the comment, much appreciated.

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  27. These are excellent hooks. I like the first one a lot, but the Network sounds like Division from PUSH, or the District from Hunger Games, or Skynet from Terminator. It's my favorite, but is there a way to make it new? (Even still, I would definitely read on! Looking forward to your hangers!!)

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    1. Thank you for the point and I definitely take it on board. Glad to know you'd read on anyway.

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  29. I'd sure read on! The voice is excellent. I'm a sucker for a "looking for a missing person" story!

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    1. Ah me too! Thank you for saying so, tis nice of you to let me know!

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  30. Seems like an interesting concept... reminds me of 'Kimmie66' by Aaron Alexovich (may have spelled that last name wrong...)

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    1. Oooh will have to look it up, thanks for the ref! And the comments ;)

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  31. Intriguing hooks! #1 is my favourite!

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    1. Thank you, glad you like it ;)

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  32. I really like these - great voice, as others mentioned. The first line is definitely a hooker, fascinating!

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  33. #1 makes me wonder what the Network is why she wants to escape.Nice job hookin' me:)

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    1. Yay thank you for letting me know!

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Please comment, I'd love to know what you think! :)